Sorry about the late replies. I've been swamped at work, but appreciate everyone checking it out and commenting.
Thank you MDH for standing up for me, but it's alright. I asked for everyone's opinion and appreciate his response. Also, "dork" is exactly what I was going for. So thanks :-)
Well, I've done a lot of different "schticks" and still continue to do them. This one happens to be the one I've had the most success with lately, so I'm going with it. Never expected this one to catch on, but I take my career seriously, so any momentum I make, regardless of the shtick, I have to try and run with it. But ideally yes, hopefully this "shtick" helps me get my foot in the door and then I can use my actually intending to be funny material to stay in the door.
A lot of other posters have addressed this, but I will make it clear. It's a bit. Part stand-up, part "performance art" for a lack of a less douchey term. I'm playing a character who's gleefully awkward and has terrible jokes.
Thank you. Yes, you are spot on. And yes, I have grown as both a person and a comedy writer, and my comedy attempts have evolved along the way.
I guess you guys are right. It is more of a "comedian's comedy" style. As comedy industry people (like Eli Braden and others) have been the people who have responded most positively to the bit. It's one of those things that seems to be funnier if you are in on the joke, than not in on the joke.
Thanks again everyone for checking it out. As a Rochester native, former Bills season ticket holder, and current LA Bills Backer, the opinion of the community I grew up in is extremely important to me. Hopefully my career will continue to grow, and I want everyone to know where I came from along the way. Thanks again!
Mike